The NEW WIP Post Girlfriends 4 Ever DLC thread [TROLL FREE Edition]
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05-17-2016, 10:09 AM
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RE: The NEW WIP Post Girlfriends 4 Ever DLC thread [TROLL FREE Edition]
Take a look at 0:04 and notice Tara's foot on the floor. Tara has her heel planted firmly on the marble of the floor. I know that makes a lot of the kinematics of moving the rest of her a lot easier, but in the back of my mind I keep thinking that heel planted on floor "isn't right" for this pose that Tara is doing.
My thought is that she should be standing on the ball of her foot, using the arch of her foot to support her weight (since her center of gravity is angled slightly forward from her heel) and that the slow thrusting has her ankle/heel rocking up and down maybe an inch (or two?) such that her heel intermittently makes contact with the floor, while the ball of her foot remains in constant contact with the floor. You've got a prime example of the kind of "ball of the foot in contact" going on with Tara's left foot up against the pillar, so "repeat" that for Tara's right foot too. Keep Tara's right knee locked to bear her weight while Sayako fucks her. At 0:08, we get an angle which kinda/sorta allows us to see Tara's abdominals while being penetrated, and there's no bulging due to insertion. This would seem to be an oversight in need of correction ... The placement of Sayako's right hand on the side of Tara's hip seems to be ... less than optimal ... for what's happening in this scene. I'm thinking that moving Sayako's right hand a bit further around Tara to achieve a grasp (and pull) on Tara's butt cheek would be a stronger/superior choice here. That way, rather than just having her hand alongside Tara's hip and "encouraging" Tara's motions ... instead you've got Sayako actively "pulling" Tara onto her cock using her hand on Tara's ass cheek. Extra bonus points are available for implementing subtle indentations from Sayako's fingers into Tara's butt when doing that pulling, along with subtle "rolling waves with the fingers" to gently massage Tara's butt with that hand while fucking her. So I'm thinking a little bit more "reach around" from Sayako is called for here. From 0:10-0:20 looks like a single loop where Tara "looks away" from Sayako, presumably because of what she's feeling down below and inside. But her head turn is so ... minor ... that it doesn't look like she's feeling all THAT much with what is happening. Also, the head turn is done in such a way as to break eye contact between Sakayo and Tara, which also dials down the emotional/sensual intensity of what they're doing. I'm thinking that a superior choice here would be to change Tara's head motion such that she still moves her nose/chin around to reorient her face (thus turning her head on her neck) but keeping her eyes locked on Sayako's. So instead of having Tara's face look up towards her foot (uh, what?) and then back at Sayako, have Tara "twirl" her nose and chin in a counterclockwise circle while maintaining eye contact with Sayako. Are the girls ... breathing ... during this scene? Near as I can tell, they aren't! The wireframe doesn't show any indication that either Sayako's nor Tara's rib cage is expanding/contracting in time with any breathing they might be doing. At this slow tempo of penetration, I'd expect both of them to be inhaling on the in strokes of Sayako's cock, and exhaling on the out strokes. Neither of their chests/ribs appears to be doing anything of the sort. Likewise, their mouths/lips don't seem to have had much/any attention paid to them (yet). It looks like Tara might be closing her mouth when she looks at her foot and then reopens her mouth again when she looks back at Sayako. Sayako is just open mouthed (slack jawed?) the entire time. Even something as simple as a slight puckering of those luscious lips, or even blowing "air kisses" back and forth while they fuck would bring a lot to this scene. And I would be completely remiss if I didn't harp on the choice of camera angles seemingly being intentionally designed to exclude being able to the Sayako's and Tara's eyes except from the poorest of angles. Is it really so hard to do a circular camera slide behind Tara's head above the shoulders with Sayako's face and eyes as the focal point of the circular move that lets us see Sayako looking up at Tara while she fucks her? Would it really be a crime to do the same thing behind Sayako's head looking up at Tara (with the pillar made glass/invisble) for a reverse view? Why are you so averse to showing us the backs of their heads and their faces, miro? Why are you so determined to avoid eye contact with your characters? Which brings up the question of ... did you include any subtleties of eye and eyelid animation in this loop? Kinda hard to tell with wireframe (and camera angles that prevent reviewing this point). If you've barely done any facial expression animation yet, I'd kind of understand (I'd be disappointed at the missed opportunity more than anything). Reason being is that this animation loop is just BEGGING for a PoV camera angle ... from both Sayako's AND Tara's points of view while looking at each other and gazing into each other's eyes (and souls) while Sayako slowly fucks Tara with her cock. This is where having Tara doing a sort of circular twirl with her nose and chin, aimed in Sayako's direction, would really help with a PoV shot, because it would let you bring Sayako's big breasts at least partway into frame while Tara looks down at Sayako. You'd also have the option of doing "x-ray" shots where Tara's arms and leg are glassy/clear to let the see each other (through her leg) better. As far as facial expressions go, if going that route, I'd want both of them to be "showing" on their faces that they're "feeling" the fucking going on down below, but I'd want Tara to be more in "command" of what she's feeling, and thus more "on top" of what's happening, while Sayako is the one who is feeling more "overwhelmed" by the sensations of what she's doing and thus less guarded in her facial expressions. That way, you can have Tara with a facial expression which shows she's "feeling it" but is calmer and more collected, with more of a "mmm, fuck me just like that..." kind of face that says she's enjoying it, but can take a lot more of what Sayako has to give her. By contrast, you can have Sayako be completely focused/fixated on what's happening now and quite unguarded and hungry/starved looking. That means little eyelid flutters and lip movements and her breath catching and looking up adoringly at Tara with singular fixation as she slow fucks Tara. Subtle little pointers here would go a LONG way to being expressive. Tara looks "proud" to be getting fucked by Sayako. Sayako looks "deeply in love" with Tara while she fucks her. Verbogeny is one of many pleasurettes afforded a creatific thinkerizer. |
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